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Spring 1998: MP # 3
A Set of Essays on Foils in Hamlet
Paper # 286     (G81 - 02)
 


 
Foils in Hamlet
 
 
1     A foil is a minor charater in a literary work that compliments the main character through similarities and differences in personality and plot. Among all the foils in Shakespear[e]'s "Hamlet," [Titles] Laertes has the biggest impact on Hamlet's character. While Hamlet maintained his status as prince, it was Laertes that represented the well bred son of the royal family and the traditional revenge hero. [The thesis does not cover the essay.]

2     Some similarities in Laertes and Hamlet were that they were both students. Laertes and Hamlet were dutiful sons that [who] were outraged and felt personally wronged by their fathers' deaths. They swore to get revenge against the assailant. Laertes and Hamlet both blamed Claudius for the deaths of their fathers'. [no '] Also, Hamlet and Laertes posed a threat to Claudius because of their potential for becoming king. They go above the law in order to seek justice, which discredits the honorable basis of their actions. There was a shared love for Laertes's sister, Ophelia. Hamlet and Laertes have seen the ghost of Hamlet's father. [?]

3      One of the differences in Laertes and Hamlet was that Laertes allowed his anger and grievance of his father's death to be known. Whereas when Hamlet's father died, he secretatively [sic] ran [?] and was deemed crazy. Laertes goes to school and indulged in a Parisian lifestyle, as Hamlet chose to study at Wittenburg in a more subdued environment. [Interesting point] Laertes has a lot of passion whereas Hamlet has none. Laertes was only raised by his father as Hamlet had a mother and father to raise him. Also, Laertes was portrayed as the well bred son of the counselor of a royal family and Hamlet portrayed [?] the role of a commoner. The ghost of Hamlet's father would talk to Laertes as he would to Hamlet. [Not true]

4     Being an ambitious young prince was a similarity in Fortinbras and Hamlet. They are both on a mission of revenge. Also, both Fortinbras and Hamlet lost their fathers'. [no '] Ironically Denmark is a similarity because it was initially controlled by Fortinbras' father, then Hamlet[' H-50]s' father, then Hamlet, and finally returning to Fortinbras. [Nice point] Fortinbras had a family tie with Hamlet's love Ophelia. [This needs a citation from the play -- I don't remember it.] They both seen [saw] the ghost of Hamlet's father. [Fortinbras did?]

5     There are differences in Fortinbras and Hamlet. Fortinbras seemed to be more eager to prove his courage than Hamlet. Fortinbras uses his anger and sorrow by attacking Denmark and reclaiming the land his father lost, while Hamlet has no actions. Fortinbras had no trouble slaying the innocent whereas Hamlet had a problem with slaying the guilty. [Nice Point!] The ghost of Hamlet's father wouldn't talk to Fortinbras, but htte [sic] ghost would talk to Hamlet.

6     Polonius represented the guarded side of Hamlet. Both men are aware of other people's motives. Polonius and Hamlet think the worst from their loved ones. An example: [For example,] Polonius ordered Reynaldo to go to Paris to spy on Laertes (Act II scene I). This behavior relates to Hamlet as he keeps himself confined. [It's a very nice point, but it needs a better example for Hamlet.] Polonius and Hamlet both seemed to stay abrupt [?] of things.

7     There are differences between Polonius and Hamlet. Polonius was portrayed as a weak person throughout the play. Hamlet acted as a mad person [cut: in order to continue his attitude of a mad person] in order to achieve his plan to kill the king. polonius would do anything to prove his loyality [sic] to the king, even before the ghost reveals Claudius is responsible for King Hamlet's death.

8     In conclusion there are foils in Shakespeare's "Hamlet," that compliment the main character through similarities and differences. Hamlet's character is impacted by Laertes, Fortinbras, Polonius, and others. The main reason for foils in Shakespeare's "Hamlet", they in one way or another have a mirror image to Hamlet character. [SS]

Barnet, S., Berman, M., Burto, W. Stubbs, M., Literature for Composition: Essays, Fiction, Poetry, and Drama, 4th Edition, HarperCollins Publishers, Inc. 1996.

     [Sometimes we all need a little help from our friends. When I was a Freshman in college, I started out as a math major, taking Calc I. I was doing o.k., possible a B in the course, but the course was taking all of my time, and I found that I wasn't interested in it. (Not good for a math major.) I went to see the Dean, and changed majors. Then I went to my math professor and explained the situation to him. I struggled through the rest of the course, but did poorly. He ended up giving me what, at the time, was called a "Gentleman's C." (Now, I guess, it is called a "Gentleperson's C.") I don't think I deserved it, but I have always remembered and been thankful. The preceding essay deserves a solid C, but probably not the low B.
     The low B, however, brought the student's course grade up to a C, and I believe the course grade is just. Throughout the course, the student had clearly been working and improving. In addition, this paper was written while the student was experiencing a severe personal problem. (Once again I say, if you are trying and have personal problems, let the instructor know. In my case, you need not tell me any details, just let me know.) Finally, this is the best paper that the student wrote all semester. In the context of the other papers in this set, the grade for this one may seem a little too high. The writer can thank my college Freshman math instructor.
     As for the claimed time of 2.8 hours, an examination of the logs (below) indicates that the student actually spent 5.5 hours. In this case, I take the discrepancy to be a reflection of the student's acknowlegement of an inability to concentrate because of the personal problem.]
 


Outline
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I. Introduction and thesis: A foil is a minor character is a literary work that compliments the main character through similarities and differences in personality and plot. Among all the foils in Shakespeare's "Hamlet," Laertes has the biggest impact on Hamlet's character. While Hamlet maintained his status as prince, it was Laertes that represented the well bred son of  the royal family and the traditional revenge hero. 

II. Laertes and Hamlet 

    A. similarities in Laertes and Hamlet 
    B. differences in Laertes and Hamlet
III. Fortinbras and Hamlet 
    A. similarities in Fortinbras and Hamlet 
    B. differences in Fortinbras and Hamlet
IV. Polonius and Hamlet 
    A. similarities in Polonius and Hamlet 
    B. differences in Polonius and Hamlet
V. Conclusion 
 
 

ENL 121 (Vavra) Grading Sheet for MP3B (1 of 3) Foils in Hamlet (Revised 11/27/97)
 

Possible 
Points
Student's 
Grading
Instructor's 
Grading
Description Totals
Audience (20)
- / 17 
0 - 5    4 The essay has a good introductory paragraph.
0 - 5    4 The essay includes a brief definition (not in the introduction) of foils, such that a student who had not previously heard the term would understand both the concept and this essay. [This was a mistake on my part. The definition is in the introduction, and it misses aspects of foils. The grade should probably have been a 2.]
0 - 5    5 The essay does not simply retell the play.
0 - 5
  
 4
The essay has a good concluding paragraph.
Thesis (20) - /  15
0 - 4    2 The thesis is recognizable, somewhere near the beginning of the essay.
0 - 4
 
 2
The thesis and essay reflect good, independent thought about Hamlet.
0 - 4    4 The thesis and essay reflect at least an average understanding of foils.
0 - 4    4 The essay reflects at least an average understanding of foils in Hamlet.
0 - 4    3 The essay reflects an above average understanding of foils in Hamlet
 Organization (20)
 - / 17 
0 - 4
 
 4 
Topic sentences relate paragraphs to the thesis.
0 - 4
 
 3 
Paragraphs are generally eight to ten sentences long. [Probably should have been a two.]
0 - 4
 
 3 
Major and minor points in the outline are logically arranged.
0 - 4
 
 3 
The essay is accompanied by a typed formal outline with subdivisions to the level of capital letters, i.e., II B. The paragraphs in the essay have been numbered and the numbers of the paragraphs have been placed in parentheses next to the corresponding part of the outline.
0 - 4
 
 4 
Paragraphs reflect subdivisions of major points. (For example, more than one paragraph is devoted to a single foil.)
2 of 3
Possible 
Points
Student's 
Grading
Instructor's 
Grading
Description Totals
Details (20) (Please fill in the blanks.) 
[Note: This rubric assumes that you will discuss at least two foils and be graded on the two you choose. You may discuss only one foil and use the same grades for both sections of this form.]
 - / 15 
0 - 3
 
 3 
An explanation of similarities establsihes __Laertes____ as a foil to ______Hamlet__________.
0 - 3
 
 3 
The differences between foil #1 (above) and ___Hamlet______ and their significance to the play are explained in detail.
0 - 3
 
 0 
The function of foil # 1 as a listener on stage (and its significance to the play) is explained in detail.
0 - 1
   
 1 
The relevance of foil # 1 to the thesis is explained in detail.
0 - 3
   
 3 
An explanation of similarities establsihes ___Fortinbras__  as a foil to ____Hamlet_.
0 - 3
 
 3 
The differences between foil #2 (above) and _____Hamlet____ and their significance to the play are explained in detail.
0 - 3
 
 1 
The function of foil # 2 as a listener on stage (and its significance to the play) is explained in detail. [A gift]
0 - 1
 
 1 
The relevance of foil # 1 to the thesis is explained in detail.
(3 of 3)
Possible 
Points
Student's 
Grading
Instructor's 
Grading
Description Totals
Style (20)
 - / 16 
0 - 3    2 Words are used correctly and accurately.
0 - 2    1 There are no (few) errors in usage. [Seen / saw]
0 - 2    2 Pronouns are used correctly.
0 - 2    2 Verb forms and tenses are used correctly.
0 - 3    3 All sentences are comprehensible.
0 - 2    1 Sentence structure is mature and varied.
0 - 3
   
 3
There are no (few) sloppy errors.
0 - 3
   
 2
Punctuation marks are used correctly.
Minus Style Penalty Points (May be regained by correcting errors)
 
Basic Grade for the Essay (100)  - / 80
Penalty Points: - __________ Late          -___________ Other -
Bonus points (6 possible)
-  / 1
0 - 2
 
 
Brainstorming
0 - 2
 
  Outlining
0 - 2
 
 1
Revision
Final Grade for the Essay  - / 81
Hostage Fifty:  
    Apostrophe 
N.B. If there is anything in the "Hostage Fifty" block, your grade is being held hostage at 50 until you earn its release. To learn how, look at the "Additional Major Paper Requirements."

Student's Comments: (You can also use the back of either page.)
 


Student's Log
Codes: B = Brainstorming; RR = Reading/Research; O =Outlining; TC = Tutoring Center;
D = Drafting; RV = Revising; E =Editing; G = Grading; T =Typing

NOTE: Revising = RV. Remember: use only one code per entry. (See Instructions.)

I used a word-processor _____while drafting _____ while revising _____ to type my paper.
 

Date: Code Started Stopped Minutes Comments
[?]
B
2:00
3:00 
20 [sic]
 for foils for Hamlet
 
RR
4:00
5:00
30 [sic]
 researched foils in Hamlet
 
D
6:00
7:30
60 [sic]
 writing rough draft
 
RV
8:00
9:00
30 [sic]
 
 
E
4:00
5:00
30 [sic]
 
 
  Distribution of Time:
Process Minutes % of Total
Brainstorming
20 
12 
Read/Research
30 
18 
Outlining
Tutoring Center
Drafting
60 
35 
Revising
30 
18 
Editing
30 
18 
Grading
Typing
Total
170 
= 2.8 hours