Dr. Vavra's ENL 121: Lit & Comp |
A Set of Essays on Short Stories Paper # 422 |
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1 Do you remember your first kiss? If you’re like most people, you would describe it as a magical occasion. Were you so certain you loved that person that you wouldn’t listen to anyone who said that you didn’t know the true feeling of love? This is what happened to Edie, the main character and narrator of Alice Munro’s “How I Met My Husband”. [."] After her first kiss, her eyes were so filled with love they didn’t see the pitfalls, twists, and turns ahead. The theme of the story is because love is blind, it can take you on a journey full of unexpected turns.
2 Like Edie, Alice Kelling, Chris Watter’s fiancee, doesn’t recognize that her love life is falling apart. Her characterization seems of a high society type because of her nice clothes- “a pair of brown of brown [Ouch] and white checked slacks and a yellow top” (775). However, Alice is also described as being “Nothing in the least pretty or even young-looking about her”(775). Blinded by her feelings for Chris, Alice is quick to judge before she knows all the facts. For instance when she gets upset at Edie for being intimate with Chris Watters. [Frag -1] (Edie of course doesn’t realize what being intimate includes.) “Girls like you are just nothing, they’re just public conveniences, just filthy little rags” (779). To any objective observer, the lack of love would be clear when after a night out, “ Chris got out of the car on one side and she got on the other and they walked off separately…” (777). Obviously though, Alice’s judgement was also clouded over with love’s blindness. Even though Edie and Alice were two very different people, they both succumbed to love’s blindness.
3 Since the story is a recollection of Edie’s life, it only makes sense that she is telling the story from her point-of view as a major character. The audience learns of the narrator’s identity in the following conversation: “Would you Edie?, Heather said. I said I didn’t know” (770). [They don't know this from the title?] Because Edie is telling the story, the audience is able to gather important subjective emotions and thoughts such as how she felt when she received her first kiss “…those little kisses, so soft…”(778) and when the letter from Chris Watters didn’t come. “I kept on going to get the mail, but my heart was heavy now like a lump of lead” (781). Therefore, the audience is able to gain a better understanding of the complexities of love through Edie’s eyes. [Relationship to thesis?]
4 Since the audience feels
as if they are Edie, the sequential events in the plot make the story enjoyable
to read. If the author started with the ending first, as the author
did in “A Rose for Emily”, the whole climax, which is when Edie ends up
marrying the mailman would be ruined. [Very nice
point] In “A Rose For Emily” the author started with the ending
first so that the audience would feel sad, but in “How I met my Husband”,
the author follows a sequential plot [as]
to trick the audience into thinking Chris Watters is the husband reflected
in the title. The kissing scene leads the reader to assume Chris is the
husband of the title. When Chris tells her his secret that he’s leaving
the area without telling his fiancee, Edie believes that she means more
to him than she does. Edie is blinded by love. She thinks that because
Chris kissed her and then told her his secret, he loves her. Edie soon
realizes that he doesn’t really love her because he never writes as he
said he would. Because she is still suffering over the heartbreak of Chris,
Edie is then blind to the love the mailman has for her until she receives
a surprising phone call. “He asked if I would like to go to Goderich, where
some well-known movie was on…I said yes and I went out with him for two
years and he asked me to marry him” (781). [In respect
to plot-- if the title of the story is "How I Met my Husband," why is so
much of the story about something else?]
5 Woman blindly in love
is a common theme. Just as Granny was jilted when George stood her up at
the altar in Porter’s “The Jilting of Granny Weatherall”, Edie was also
jilted when Watter’s letter doesn’t come in the mail. Unlike Granny though,
something good does come of Edie’s misfortune. She makes a good friend
of the mailman, who soon becomes her husband. Each of the women mentioned,
Edie, Alice, and Granny, were blind to love’s pitfalls and unexpected turns.
Fortunately for Edie, something good did come of her blindness of love
but unfortunately, there are still many others out there following love’s
blind[ness]
journey.
Although I wish that the writer had looked a little more closely at the question of plot, this is a very good essay.
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I Intro + Thesis -- Because love is blind, it can take you on a journey full of unexpected turns. |
(4)? | II. Plot -- sequential
B. Chris Waters
2. he's leaving |
(2)? | III. Characterization
2. Mental
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(3)? | IV. Point-of-view
2. 1st kiss + when letter didn't come
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(5) | V. Conclusion -- Between women, blind love is common. |
Possible
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Student's
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Instructor's
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Description | Totals |
Audience (20) | 19 | |||
0 - 3 | 3 | The essay has a good introductory paragraph. | ||
0 - 3 | 3 | The essay has a good concluding paragraph. | ||
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3 | The essay goes beyond the obvious. | ||
0-10 | 10 | The essay does not simply retell the story. | ||
Thesis (20) | 18 | |||
0 - 5 | 5 | The thesis is clearly identifiable, somewhere near the beginning of the essay. | ||
0 - 5 | 5 | The thesis enables an interpretation, not a retelling, of the story. | ||
0 - 5 | 5 | The thesis reflects at least an average understanding of the concepts studied. | ||
0 - 5 | 3 | The thesis reflects an above average understanding of the concepts studied and the story. | ||
Organization (20) | 13 | |||
0 - 5 | 5 | The essay has at least four paragraphs. | ||
0 - 5 | 3 | Topic sentences relate paragraphs to the thesis. | ||
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5 | Topic sentences cover paragraphs. | ||
0 - 5 | 0 | Outline and paragraphs reflect subdivisions of major points. | ||
Details (20) | 16 | |||
5 | 5 | The essay includes some details. | ||
0 - 5 | 4 | One concept (_Point of view_) is explained in good detail. | ||
0 - 5 | 3 | A second concept (_Plot___) is explained in good detail. | ||
0 - 5 | 4 | A third concept (_characterization_) is explained in good detail. |
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Possible
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Student's
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Instructor's
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Description | Totals |
Style (20) | 19 | |||
0 - 3 | 3 | Words are used correctly and accurately. | ||
0 - 2 | 2 | There are no (few) errors in usage. | ||
0 - 2 | 2 | Pronouns are used correctly. | ||
0 - 2 | 2 | Verb forms and tenses are used correctly. | ||
0 - 3 | 3 | All sentences are comprehensible. | ||
0 - 2 | 2 | Sentence structure is mature and varied. | ||
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4 | Underlining, italics, and quotation marks are used correctly. | ||
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1 | There are few or no sloppy errors.["of brown"] | ||
Minus Style Penalty Points (May be regained by correcting errors) | -1 | |||
Basic Grade for the Essay (100) | 84 | |||
Penalty Points: - __________ Late -___________ Other | - | |||
Bonus Points (9 possible) | +1 | |||
0 - 3 | Brainstorming | |||
0 - 3 | Outlining | |||
0 - 3 | 1 | Revision | ||
Final Grade for the Essay | 85 | |||
Hostage Fifty: |
Student's Comments: (You can also use the back of either page.)
Codes: B = Brainstorming; RR = Reading/Research; O
=Outlining; TC = Tutoring Center;
D = Drafting; RV = Revising; E =Editing; G
= Grading; T =Typing
NOTE: Revising = RV. Remember: use only one code per entry. (See Instructions.)
I used a word-processor _____while drafting _____ while revising __x___
to type my paper.
Date: | Code | Started | Stopped | Minutes | Comments |
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Read the stories. I didn't understand a couple of them -- so I quit and went on to the next story. |
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[Grrrr] Reread the story "How I Met My Husband," did some brainstorming & started outline. |
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Did outline |
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Started drafting my paper. |
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Drafting |
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9/24 | D | 9:05 | 9:50 | 45 | Drafted characterization |
9/28 | D | 6:15 | 7:40 | 85 | Did point-of-view paragraph & Intro |
9/29 | D | 7:00 | 7:35 | 35 | did conclusion |
T | 3:30 | 4:00 | 30 | typed my paper | |
9/30 | TC | 2:10 | 2:50 | 40 | |
RV | 6:15 | 7:55 | 100 | Revised it, then printed out final copies. |
Distribution of Time:
Process | Minutes | % of Total |
Brainstorming |
45
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7
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Read/Research |
130
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20
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Outlining |
40
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6
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Tutoring Center |
40
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6
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Drafting |
270
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41
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Revising |
100
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15
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Editing |
0
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0
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Grading |
0
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0
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Typing |
30
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5
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Total |
655
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= 10.9 hours |