Improving Your Style
"He went swimming. She did the dishes." Those
two sentences are what started me working on the problems of teaching grammar.
I was, at the time, a graduate assistant at Cornell, and I was trying to
explain to my students how a semicolon can be used to emphasize the contrast
between ideas that are expressed in two main clauses. After the semester
was over, one student told me what my problem was -- few, if any of the
students understood what a "clause" is. That realization led to the KISS
Approach to teaching grammar. The explanations here are intended for
my students in Freshman Composition, students who, by the time they use
this page, should be fairly familiar with recognizing clauses.
Combining Main Clauses Main clauses can be joined by a comma plus
"and," "or," or "but," but they can also be joined, often more effectively,
by a semicolon, a colon, or a dash.
The weather was bad -- it was cold and windy.Traditionally, the difference between the colon and the dash is a matter of tone -- the colon tends to be used in formal writing; the dash is more casual. Colons, and especially dashes, can be used to set off other constructions which convey a general/specific relationship. A foot-hold trap is exactly what it sound like -- a trap that captures and holds the animal by the foot.This sentence was originally written by a student using a semicolon: A foot-hold trap is exactly what it sound like; a trap that captures and holds the animal by the foot.The semicolon, however, suggests a dump to long-term memory. In this case, in other words, it invites the reader to interpret "a trap" as the subject of an additional verb. When that verb does not appear, the reader becomes confused. Exercise 1 Decombining Long Sentences The average professional writes about twenty words per main clause, which means that the average professional reader is accustomed to processing sentences within that range. Some students, however, average 25 words per main clause. Such complexity may overwhelm your readers' (including your instructors') processing ability. [In other words, your paper may get a low grade not because of what you wrote, but because of the complex way in which you wrote it.] The following exercises provide practice in decombining long main clauses into shorter ones. Exercise 1 |
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1. Some students spread semicolons throughout their papers as if the punctuation marks were salt and pepper. Semicolons have only two functions: 1) to separate main clauses (preferably when they present contrasting ideas), and 2) to separate items in a list (such as addresses) when the items in the list themselves contain commas. Inserting semicolons for any other reason will cause problems for readers because the semicolon indicates a dump to long-term memory. (See the psycholinguistic model of how the brain processes language.) 2. Some grammarians don't agree that main ideas usually appear in the main S / V / C pattern, but these same grammarians rarely study sentences in context, nor do they teach their students to do so. Once you can identify subordinate clauses, you can decide this question for yourself. |
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