This document is part of a study, conducted by Ed Vavra, of the syntax of students' writing.


Spring 1995 Pre Writing Student # 23

Student's Text: Comments:
    \-\{In my essay} I'm going to give name {to the these people,}\,\the two women's names will be Chris and Kathy, \-\and the supervisor will be Bob. \-\{In this story} Chris and Kathy were short skirts {to work }\-\and Bob just could not keep his eyes {off them.} \-\So Bob said [that there skirts were distracting {to them.}]\-\Chris and Kathy got upset [because they saw nothing wrong {with there skirts}] and desided to sue. 

     \-\Now {in there jobs} {as the city planners} I see no problem {with women dressing} nicely \-\but maybe there skirts were just too short, \-\and the supervisor just like [what he sow] and counld not stop looking. \-\It is not the Chris's and Kathy's falt [that Bob can not control him self.] \-\But this is not sexual harassment, but maybe a comument {for the girls.}

     \-\And [if the girl don't like the comument] they should not dress this way. \-\But they should be allow to dress nice and not get harassment {from a man} [who can not controle himself.

     \-\What should be done \-\may tell the men to look and keep his mouth close \-\and maybe tell the women not to were short short skirts. \-\Don't know \,\you {in a no win sixuation.}


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Note: I'm guessing that the beginning of the last paragraph means "What should be done? Maybe tell the men ..."
 

Raw Data

Calculated Data

Number of words = 208
Number of paragraphs = 4

Number of main clauses = 19

# of Prepositional Phrases = 13
# of words in P Phrases = 40

# of Sub Clauses Level 1 = 6
# of Words in = 37

# of Sub Clauses Level 2 = 0
# of Words in = 0

# of Sub Clauses Level 3 = 0
# of Words in = 0

# of Sub Clauses Level 4= 0
# of Words in = 0

# of Fragments = 0
# of Comma Splices = 2
# of Run-ons = 1

# of S/V Agr Errors = 0

Words per main clause = 10.9

Prep Phrases / Main Clause = .68
% of words in P Phrases = 19

Total Sub Clauses / Main Cl = .32

Sub Clauses Level 2+ / MC = 0


Words per paragraph = 52.0

Main clauses per paragraph = 4.8


Unanalyzed Text:

     In my essay I'm going to give name to the these people, the two women's names will be Chris and Kathy, and the supervisor will be Bob. In this story Chris and Kathy were short skirts to work and Bob just could not keep his eyes off them. So Bob said that there skirts were distracting to them. Chris and Kathy got upset because they saw nothing wrong with there skirts and desided to sue.
     Now in there jobs as the city planners I see no problem with women dressing nicely but maybe there skirts were just too short, and the supervisor just like what he sow and counld not stop looking. It is not the Chris's and Kathy's falt that Bob can not control him self. But this is not sexual harassment, but maybe a comument for the girls.
     And if the girl don't like the comument they should not dress this way. But they should be allow to dress nice and not get harassment froma man who can not controle himself.
     What should be done may tell the men to look and keep his mouth close and maybe tell the women not to were short short skirts. Don't know you in a no win sixuation.