This document is part of a study, conducted by Ed Vavra, of the syntax of students' writing.
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| \-\Sexual harrassment is an issue [many women and men must begin to correct.] \-\{In this incident} a supervisor repremanded two women [because he thought [their skirts were too short.]] \-\I don't agree [that repremanding them would correct his problem.] \-\Maybe [if he would've talked {to them}] they would've understood his point {of view.} \-\I would agree {with him} only [if the women's skirts were distracting others not only him.] \-\Also [if he doesn't want these problems] there should be a dress code {for everyone} to abide. \F\Not only women. |
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For what it is worth, I see nothing wrong with the final fragment. It is, in my opinion, preferable to, and more emphatic than, the negative appositive ("women" to "everyone") that would result from a comma after "abide" and a small "n."
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Calculated Data |
| Number
of words = 88 Number of paragraphs = 1 # of Prepositional Phrases = 5 # of Sub Clauses Level
1 = 6 # of Sub Clauses Level 2 = 1 # of Sub Clauses Level 3 = 0 # of Sub Clauses Level 4= 0 # of Fragments = 1 # of S/V Agr Errors = 0 |
Words
per main clause = 12.7 Prep Phrases / Main Clause = .71 % of words in P Phrases = 12 Total Sub Clauses / Main Cl = 1.00 Sub Clauses Level 2+ / MC = .14
Words per paragraph = 88.0 |
Unanalyzed Text:
Sexual harrassment is an issue many women and men must begin to correct. INthis incident a supervisor repremanded two women because he thought their skirts were too short. I don't agree that repremanding them would correct his problem. Maybe if he would've talked to them they would've understood his point of view. I would agree with him only if the women's skirts were distracting others not only him. Also if he doesn't want these problems there should be a dress code for everyone to abide. Not only women.