This document is part of a study, conducted by Ed Vavra, of the syntax of students' writing.


Spring 1995 First Major Paper: Student # 02

Student's Text: Comments:
     \-\Many people conceive problems {in different ways.} \-\A problem [that I have encountered this year] is the closing {of Route 262} {for the use} {by snowmobilers.} \-\It will be closed {from November 1} {till March 31.} \-\This closing {of the road} will cause many different problems. \-\Two major problems are [that it limits the access {for hunting and fishing} {along the Kinzua Reservoir} and eliminates the access {for emergency vehicles} {in case} {of an accident.}]

     \-\Route 262, {along the Kinzua Reservoir} has always been open year round {for many seasonal activities.} \-\Now the closing will eliminate two {of three major activities.} \-\Hunting {for deer and late season small game} will be taken away [which will affect the numbers {animals} {per mile} {in the area} {of the Kinzua Dam.}] \-\Also icefishing will be limited {from Chappel Bay} {up the reservoir} [because there is no other access {on the other side} {past Chappel Bay} {to the main body} {on the reservoir.}]

     \-\This only leaves the one mile {of road} {from the start} {of the reservoir} {to Chappel Bay} {on Route 321} [before it turns away {from the reservoir.}] \-\{By the time} [the main body {of the reservoir} freezes] this lower mile {of water} will be fished out. \-\Even {by the time} [the main part {of the reservoir} freezes] the closing {of Route 262} will mean [the icefishermen will have to take either Route 321 or Route 6 {to Route 59} {to the main body} {of water.}] \-\Either way is {at least} twenty miles farther {than taking the straight path} there, Route 262.

     \-\Both snowmobilers and sportsmen have used the road up {till now} {with no troubles} {at all.} \-\Both vehicles and the snowmobilers had their own side {of the road} to go in and come back out on. \-\The trucks or four-wheel drive vehicles ran the right side {of the road} going {toward Route 59} and the left side {of the road} going {toward Route 321} \-\and the snowmobilers were {to the opposite} {of that.} \-\[While the trucks were {on the road}] they ran {with their headlights on and their four way flashers on} [whether it was day or night.]

     \-\{With the travel} {of trucks} {on Route 262} they keep the road packed down [because there is on winter maintenance {on the road.}] \-\{Without the travel} {of trucks} {on the road} {by the time} [December comes around] there would be too much snow {on the road} to get any type {of emergency vehicle} {on the road.} \-\This causes the next problem {of closing Route 262} \R\[if there would be an accident {along the reservoir}] Route 262 is the only way to get {to it.} \-\{Like the incident last year,} there were three backpackers {on the Rimrock-Morison trail} \-\and the feel and sliced his leg open {on a piece} {of rebar.} \-\The one hiker went {for help} and ended up {on Route 262.} \-\{By then} it was {after midnight} \-\and luckily there were some icefishermen just leaving the ice and found the hiker {on the road.} \-\Using the icefishermens equipment and toboggan they were able to get the hurt man {off of the trail} and {down to the road} [were the truck took him {the ambulance} {at the end} {of the road.}]

     \-\So far this year {since the closing} {of the road} the snowmobilers have run everywhere {with no care.} \-\They drive {on the banks} {of the road} and {down in the ditches.} \-\They have been {in the campgrounds} [which are gated {for the winter}] and ride {on the sides} {of the road} {along Route 321.} \-\The snowmobilers also have a trail [that is twenty miles long.] \-\It starts {on Route 321} and ends {at the end} {of Route 262.} \-\{With all} {of that trail} why would they need Route 262 all {to themselves.}

     \-\{With this closing} {of Route 262} it has created more problems {than any good.} \-\Leaving it open would be safer {in case} {of emergencies} and would get the use {by the hunters and icefishermen} [that it should.] \-\Hopefully {by next year} these problems will be seen \-\and Route 262 will again be used {by all.}

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 
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The use of "it" as the subject here is typical of many students who are apparently uncomfortable with gerunds as subjects. This writer does start to use one correctly in the next sentence, but note how that sentence goes awry.

Raw Data

Calculated Data

Number of words = 686
Number of paragraphs = 7

Number of main clauses = 38

# of Prepositional Phrases = 108
# of words in P Phrases = 330

# of Sub Clauses Level 1 = 17
# of Words in = 169

# of Sub Clauses Level 2 = 0
# of Words in = 0

# of Sub Clauses Level 3 = 0
# of Words in = 0

# of Sub Clauses Level 4= 0
# of Words in = 0

# of Fragments = 0
# of Comma Splices = 0
# of Run-ons = 1

# of S/V Agr Errors = 0

Words per main clause = 18.1

Prep Phrases / Main Clause = 2.84
% of words in P Phrases = 48

Total Sub Clauses / Main Cl = .45

Sub Clauses Level 2+ / MC = 0


Words per paragraph = 98.0

Main clauses per paragraph = 5.4


Unanalyzed Text:

      Many people conceive problems in different ways. A problem that I have encountered this year is the closing of Route 262 for the use by snowmobilers. It will be closed from November 1 till March 31. This closing of the road will cause many different problems. Two major problems are that it limits the access for hunting and fishing along the Kinzua Reservoir and eliminates the access for emergency vehicles in case of an accident.
     Route 262, along the Kinzua Reservoir has always been open year round for many seasonal activities. Now the closing will eliminate two of’ three major activities. Hunting for deer and late season small game will be taken away which will affect the numbers animals per mile in the area of the Kinzua Dam. Also icefishing will be limited from Chappel Bay up the reservoir because there is no other access on the other side past Chappel Bay to the main body on the reservoir.
     This only leaves the one mile of road from the start of the reservoir to Chappel Bay on Route 321 before it turns away from the reservoir. By the time the main body of the reservoir freezes this lower mile of water will be fished out. Even by the time the main part of the reservoir freezes the closing of Route 262 will mean the icefishermen will have to take either Route 321 or Route 6 to Route 59 to the main body of water. Either way is at least twenty miles farther than taking the straight path there, Route 262.
     Both snowmobilers and sportsmen have used the road up till now with no troubles at all. Both vehicles and the snowmobilers had their own side of the road to go in and come back out on. The trucks or four-wheel drive vehicles ran the right side of the road going toward Route 59 and the left side of the road going toward Route 321 and the snowmobilers were to the opposite of that. While the trucks were on the road they ran with their headlights on and their four way flashers on whether it was day or night.
     With the travel of trucks on Route 262 they keep the road packed down because there is on winter maintenance on the road. Without the travel of trucks on the road by the time December comes around there would be too much snow on the road to get any type of emergency vehicle on the road. This causes the next problem of closing Route 262 if there would be an accident along the reservoir Route 262 is the only way to get to it. Like the incident last year , there were three backpackers on the Rimrock-Morison trail and the feel and sliced his leg open on a piece of rebar. The one hiker went for help and ended up on Route 262. By then it was after midnight and luckily there were some icefishermen just leaving the ice and found the hiker on the road. Using the icefishermens equipment and toboggan they were able to get the hurt man off of the trail and down to the road were the truck took him the ambulance at the end of the road.
     So far this year since the closing of the road the snowmobilers have run everywhere with no care. They drive on the banks of the road and down in the ditches. They have been in the campgrounds which are gated for the winter and ride on the sides of the road along Route 321. The snowmobilers also have a trail that is twenty miles long. It starts on Route 321 and ends at the end of Route 262. With all of that trail why would they need Route 262 all to themselves.
     With this closing of Route 262 it has created more problems than any good. Leaving it open would be safer in case of emergencies and would get the use by the hunters and icefishermen that it should. Hopefully by next year these problems will be seen and Route 262 will again be used by all.