then my oldest sister Cyndee and then me and Crystal, Tara, and 

Amanda / they're my youngest sisters. / My dad is 30 years old and

is a chef. / My mom is 28 and doesn't work. / My oldest sister is 12 /

she's {in 7th grade} / she's a brat. / I'm 9 / and I'm {in the 4th grade}. /

My young sister is 7 and {in 2nd grade} / My other young sister is 2. /

And the other is 3 months old. / Eddie, my dad, Tara, Mom Crystal, 

and amanda have brown hair. / Me and Cyndee have blond hair. /

My, Cyndee, Crystal, and mom have brown eyes. / Eddi, Tara, and 

Amanda have blue eyes. / 

     I live {in a brick hous} {on fox Dr.} / There are three rooms 

living room, kitchen, and bathroom. / There are four bedrooms. / I

share a bedroom{with my sister} Cyndee. / I have a basement {with 

a workshop laundry room and famly room}. / I have a back yard {with a

hammock and clothes line and an ugly evergreen bush}. / And {in my front

yard} I have some flowers and bushes. / My house has 13 windows

and 3 doors. / Only one bathroom (DO?) / and that's bad! /

     The worst day{in my life }was [when I was tired] and [we had to 

walk all day {at the zoo}]. We saw the Monkeys, Zebras, prarie dogs,

lions, tigers, reptiles, birds, and seals. / Then we ate pizza / and I

saw a elephant, giraffe. / I was eight / and I didn't like going ^{Note #1} 

{to the zoo}. / and I got to see the baby hippos / and I don't like

im. / We also got to ride the metro /and it really went fast. / It made a

stop every 12 secounds / and more and more and more and more 

people got on / and I kept on falling down, [Because I had to stand 

[because there was too many people {on the metro}.]] /